Boy Fishing
I think we are ready to start planning on this story. The title, by the way is just a working title. It telegraphs too much of the story for us to use it in the vid.
Here is my (revised) thinking: Main character is 35 year old male, married, two children. He is giving too much attention to career and career advancement. His family knows that but he does not. He is a sympathetic character. (Change from my previous idea.) His crisis now is that he has received a job offer that will eat up even more of his time. He will have less time for his family (maybe more commuting time) and he will leave his current employer in something of a lurch. But the offer is a big step up.
Open: We see him driving along the road that will pass HV. As he approaches the RR station, his way is blocked by bales of hay in the road. He parks and gets out of the car. (We do not see him jump, SL style, out of the car.) During this time, we convey the above background by voices in head.
(Note: I have checked out two free cars and doubt that they will work for us. We need to find out more about cars. I suppose I might be willing to do a vid about cars if somebody wanted to give us what we need.)
He (Kronos, this is your character. What is his name?) looks around. Head voices remind him that he has been here before. He moves past the boxcars, HV side. Passes a drum with fire (establishes it). He walks with some conflict. Head voices tell him he is wasting time. Should be doing something useful. As he walks onto the bridge, head voices pause, then resume more softly. He takes the fishing pole and attaches it. Shows it clearly. Then changes avatar in to Huck Finn. (I don’t really mean Huck Finn, just the type. He is Everyboy.) Huck is still holding pole, for continuity
Head voices get faint and fall silent as he walks to rail gap where he will fish. (I will put up a transparent bar. Kronos can see it by using highlight transparent. Kronos can just walk into it. It will stop him.) We see him catch one fish. Maybe we see him sit, if that will work with the pole. Cut. Set to sundown. Dissolve to the sundown view. He stands up. Picks up pail (if we have one), detaches pole, walks toward land. As he crosses to land he stops. Morphs back into man. We cover the morph with a dissolve. He may look just a little younger. He is barefoot, but camera does not see that yet.
The head voices are silent. He walks toward burning drum. Head voice mentions job offer. He tosses paper into the drum. (Need gesture here.) He walks back to car. Camera picks up bare feet. He jumps into car. Drives back the way he came. Fade to white.
I think that will stand by itself. Just one vid. How about it, Kronos?
Here is my (revised) thinking: Main character is 35 year old male, married, two children. He is giving too much attention to career and career advancement. His family knows that but he does not. He is a sympathetic character. (Change from my previous idea.) His crisis now is that he has received a job offer that will eat up even more of his time. He will have less time for his family (maybe more commuting time) and he will leave his current employer in something of a lurch. But the offer is a big step up.
Open: We see him driving along the road that will pass HV. As he approaches the RR station, his way is blocked by bales of hay in the road. He parks and gets out of the car. (We do not see him jump, SL style, out of the car.) During this time, we convey the above background by voices in head.
(Note: I have checked out two free cars and doubt that they will work for us. We need to find out more about cars. I suppose I might be willing to do a vid about cars if somebody wanted to give us what we need.)
He (Kronos, this is your character. What is his name?) looks around. Head voices remind him that he has been here before. He moves past the boxcars, HV side. Passes a drum with fire (establishes it). He walks with some conflict. Head voices tell him he is wasting time. Should be doing something useful. As he walks onto the bridge, head voices pause, then resume more softly. He takes the fishing pole and attaches it. Shows it clearly. Then changes avatar in to Huck Finn. (I don’t really mean Huck Finn, just the type. He is Everyboy.) Huck is still holding pole, for continuity
Head voices get faint and fall silent as he walks to rail gap where he will fish. (I will put up a transparent bar. Kronos can see it by using highlight transparent. Kronos can just walk into it. It will stop him.) We see him catch one fish. Maybe we see him sit, if that will work with the pole. Cut. Set to sundown. Dissolve to the sundown view. He stands up. Picks up pail (if we have one), detaches pole, walks toward land. As he crosses to land he stops. Morphs back into man. We cover the morph with a dissolve. He may look just a little younger. He is barefoot, but camera does not see that yet.
The head voices are silent. He walks toward burning drum. Head voice mentions job offer. He tosses paper into the drum. (Need gesture here.) He walks back to car. Camera picks up bare feet. He jumps into car. Drives back the way he came. Fade to white.
I think that will stand by itself. Just one vid. How about it, Kronos?
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